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Comic - "One Pagers"

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  • vwranglervwrangler Posts: 5,005
    edited 1:12AM

    Greybro said:

    Anyone on the thread is welcome to check it out and offer feedback if you have any.

    A couple small technical things:

    - watch the direction of the tails on your speech balloons. A couple are pointing to the wrong people: page 6, frame 2; page 6, frame 6; maybe page 10 frame 3 (the "no" points to one of the men when maybe it should be coming from somewhere in the corridor).

    - Page 6 Frame 6 also feels weirdly composed in context; in frame 5, the old man is up next to everyone, then in frame 6 he's over by the door some distance away, and then in frame 7 he's back with everyone again. It feels sort of like it was meant to be his exit line, and then you changed your mnd about the direction of the scene.

    Hope this is helpful. 

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  • DiscipleDisciple Posts: 206

    Greybro said:

    Moonlit Massacre

    Fleeing people seem to be running upon the water, like in a Kung Fu movie. Dramatic, but intended?

    Hallelujah!
    Disciple

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